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1-Sentence Pitch Practice

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Hi folks. Today I was told my 1-Sentence pitch sucks. So I wanted to give us all the opportunity to try to refine and get feedback on our 1-Sentence pitches. How about a thread where we post our 1 sentence pitch and have others say if they get it or not. We can also see if we can explain the idea in other words.
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Wholesale hotel rates.
I don't get it. What about wholesale hotel rates? Maybe add a verb? Make it easier to visualize
If I had to guess what your startup does – a place where businesses can buy bulk hotel rates?
Thanks for the feedback. We allow anyone to purchase hotel rooms at the wholesale rate. This hasn't been available to the public before, so it is a new concept and hard to distill in one sentence.
How about: Wholesale hotel rates for anyone.
We allow consumers to purchase hotel rooms at the wholesale rates previously only available to travel agencies.... something like that? The one sentence pitches are super hard. I am really bad at it too, so I'm just trying to make sense of it.
We are Barbra: we give teams the tools and motivation to learn new skills.
Where do you source your lessons from?
We provide some standard lessons, but we mostly encourage users to save their own learning resources there and structure it however they like. So we are a learning manager – not really a content provider.
Oh ok I see. How exactly do you keep teams motivated?