Share your one sentence messaging / pitch and get feedback if it's crystal clear

Carsten Pleiser
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Messaging is ultra important. Let's see your one sentence pitches and provide feedback to other hunters if it's clear and enticing.

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Alexey Shashkov
Inspired product maker
I like the idea, Carsten! 🙌🙂 My one-sentence pitch: «Getlanding.io is a web application for automatic landing page generation based on the user’s content.»
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Carsten Pleiser
2 x Founder • Advisor • Angel Investor
@shashcoffe I like it a lot. Maybe one point for feedback. You could make it more outcome / benefit based and also more specific towards your audience. GetLanding.io helps marketers build stunning landing pages fast, without the need to hire devs, designers or waste time trying to do it yourself. Gain: I can develop stunning landing pages fast Pain: I have to hire devs, developers which are expensive. I can probably do it, but it takes me hours to do. What do you think?
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Alexey Shashkov
Inspired product maker
@ckpleiser I think it's cooler than my version=) Thanks a lot, Carsten. I really appreciate your feedback!
Carsten Pleiser
2 x Founder • Advisor • Angel Investor
@shashcoffe I think it may work better, but good to get other feedback.
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Alexey Shashkov
Inspired product maker
@ckpleiser I owe you one, Carsten. It's really helpful!
Dawn Veltri
Director of Marketing @ RAEK
@shashcoffe @ckpleiser I don't think you can take the word automatic out. Everyone says you can build landing pages fast — no one is saying automatic. Fast will be interpreted relative to a marketer's ability where as automatic is a damn super power.
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Carsten Pleiser
2 x Founder • Advisor • Angel Investor
Which one is more compelling? Version 1: "Say goodbye to time-sucking copy & paste, tedious adjustments, and complicated approval processes. Say hello to legally-binding eSignatures & workflows based on flexible, intelligent documents" or Version 2: "Paperless let’s you create, sign, and manage intelligent documents on one single, easy-to-use & secure platform."
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Carsten Pleiser
2 x Founder • Advisor • Angel Investor
@shashcoffe any feedback / preference for the above?
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Youri Nelson
Co-Founder of Telios.io
@ckpleiser I like version 2 better, the first one has too many complex words in my opinion by that I mean that it make me have to think a lot more, which is not a bad thing but the second I can "visualize" much faster.
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Youri Nelson
Co-Founder of Telios.io
@ckpleiser Also left me wondering what you mean by "intelligent document", which then makes me more concern about the meaning of the sentence than the product itself.
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Alexey Shashkov
Inspired product maker
@ckpleiser Carsten, I like the second one because it’s short and concise!
Dawn Veltri
Director of Marketing @ RAEK
@ckpleiser Version 1 has a lot of adjectives that slows down the flow. Version 2 is more concise but isn't dramatically different than other document programs. Looking at your website the collaboration and workflows really stand out to me. "Kiss time-sucking copy & paste, adjustments, and fragmented approval processes goodbye. Say hello to intelligent document creation, collaboration, and intuitive approval workflows all in one spot." I had the same thought as @youreka, I don't really know what an intelligent document is but I looked it up and I think your target market probably does.
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David J. Kim
Co-Founder of Between
Thanks for the idea Carsten! "Between is a video app that makes everyone sound like they're in the same room." Or: "Merging audio from physical and digital meetings into one."
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Carsten Pleiser
2 x Founder • Advisor • Angel Investor
@between_team I cannot quite visualise yet what Between.app does. Having had a look at your website, I know do. Kind of. What about: "Give your remote team a seat at the table with a video calling platform that engages everyone"
Carsten Pleiser
2 x Founder • Advisor • Angel Investor
@between_team thought here is that video platforms are usually not engaging and employees usually feel disconnected. And with Between.app you're challenging the status quo.
David J. Kim
Co-Founder of Between
@ckpleiser That does sound good! I suppose to help visualize it a bit better: If you look at our PH video, you'll notice someone moving from one device to the next in the physical meeting room. (The person from home, which is me!) With Between, people in the physical meeting room take out their laptops & phones. Remote members can move between these laptops and phones and talk to whoever they want. It's better than every remote member being on the TV. Instead they can all move to different places in the room. There is a psychological difference, you'll notice your remote colleagues a lot more. But a more obvious difference is that you'll be able to hear your remote colleagues better, AND they'll be able to hear you better.
Maya Rioux
marketing & whatnot
ShelfSet gives small businesses big tech analysis, tracking, and reporting on share of shelf space - all with one pic.
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Maya Rioux
marketing & whatnot
& thanks for getting this thread started @ckpleiser - great exercise and feedback opp!
Carsten Pleiser
2 x Founder • Advisor • Angel Investor
@mayasinclaire Like it but as a non-retailer I had to look up what share of shelf space means ;) Makes total sense. Could you narrow down small businesses even further to clarify who you can help the most. Seems like a cool product!
Harm
Curious engineer.
Neat! Here it goes: "No downtime with dead simple disk space monitoring. Disknotifier.com"
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Rucha Joshi
Product Design + Research
great! We are still in pre-launch phase. here's mine, still not sure Version 1 Thursday.social is a place where remote teams do weekly socials Version 2 Thursday.social is a place for you to hang out with your remote teammates and play games in small break out groups