1-Sentence Pitch Practice

Gabriel Birnbaum
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Hi folks. Today I was told my 1-Sentence pitch sucks. So I wanted to give us all the opportunity to try to refine and get feedback on our 1-Sentence pitches. How about a thread where we post our 1 sentence pitch and have others say if they get it or not. We can also see if we can explain the idea in other words.

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Wholesale hotel rates.
Founder @ Barbra – Learning for teams
@ryan_donk I don't get it. What about wholesale hotel rates? Maybe add a verb? Make it easier to visualize
Founder @ Barbra – Learning for teams
@ryan_donk If I had to guess what your startup does – a place where businesses can buy bulk hotel rates?
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@gavri_birnbaum Thanks for the feedback. We allow anyone to purchase hotel rooms at the wholesale rate. This hasn't been available to the public before, so it is a new concept and hard to distill in one sentence.
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@gavri_birnbaum How about: Wholesale hotel rates for anyone.
Founder @ Barbra – Learning for teams
@ryan_donk We allow consumers to purchase hotel rooms at the wholesale rates previously only available to travel agencies.... something like that? The one sentence pitches are super hard. I am really bad at it too, so I'm just trying to make sense of it.
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@gavri_birnbaum Where do you source your lessons from?
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@ryan_donk We provide some standard lessons, but we mostly encourage users to save their own learning resources there and structure it however they like. So we are a learning manager – not really a content provider.
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@gavri_birnbaum Oh ok I see. How exactly do you keep teams motivated?