Which description is better?
Nihal Kothiyal
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What do you guys think, which one to keep?
If you have a better description, let me know.
https://readhive.webflow.io
NEW description: Tired of wasting time on lousy books?
Life's too short for that! Enter ReadHive, your book buddy. We make finding awesome reads a breeze. Whether you're hunting for new classics or hidden gems, we've got your back. Say goodbye to book boredom!
OLD description: Feeling overwhelmed by the sheer number of books out there. Readhive is here to help you find that are worth giving a try. Whether you're looking for a new classic to add to your shelf or a hidden gem you've never heard of, Readhive has something for you.
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Aljoša Židan@aljosa_z
I like the new one more. Although I would try to get it even shorter. When I write copy I always try to dissect each word in the sentence and understand if it gives any value to my overall objective. If not, it does not have to be here.
If would ask myself for example, is it possible to write this "Life's too short for that! Enter ReadHive, your book buddy. We make finding awesome reads a breeze." in one sentence?
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The new one is smartly phrased!
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I would use more storry telling. Its about books after all 😏
@sentry_co like? any example?
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@nihalkothiyal "Finding gems in a sea of options is a challenge. Readhive is your personal genie in a bottle for finding your next best read of your life" 👉 Sea, Genie, Diamonds. 👉 almost like a story / adventure. (Might need further iteration, try Chat GPT4 Plus for that)
The new one is just easier to read and understand.
The new one, but make it ultra short
@nihalkothiyal Here's my take (and I copywrite for a living):
Tired of wasting time on lousy books?
Enter ReadHive -- we make finding awesome reads a breeze. Whether you're hunting for classics or hidden gems, we've got your back. Say goodbye to book boredom!
The new one is smartly phrased!