@devika_naik I think its better.However, i like the “is not a blackbox” most. This part is really focussing on the problem which you think that users have (not knowing what to invest in). I would point out more how you aim to solve this problem better than existing solutions.
This part i would highlight and potentially even remove the “tech based asset manager” - quite frankly, its not really important if the problem is solved with AI, rules, magic or whatever - as long as it’s solved in a better way :)
@fabian_kutschera spot on. Thank you! Existing digital solutions are automated, passive and hands-off. E.g. Acorns, Stash, Wealthfront etc. you have no clue where exactly you are invested and why how your investments changed. Too many words to post there but I'll update the image with some features.
@devika_naik sounds good. Might be a bit hard to get feedback here since most products here are about productivity or other products where everyone can relate to... good luck!
You could build a real landing page and launch some ads on subreddits about investing, just to check how many real potential users would convert and buy your product.